Students at school know exactly what homework is, what its purpose is and if it really helps. Actually, it lost its purpose a long tome ago. When the child just goes to school, he has all the energy to study but after some time he loses his energy.
After reading the article in CBS news, that talks about an 11 year old boy, who studies in elementary school and decides to show the world his opinion about homework, we can get a better prespective on them. He says that homework does not help anyone and he can't see the reason to do them.
When I think about homework, it really helps the students. It makes the student open his notebook and understand much better the material. Moreover, homework can reflect the student's knowledge. If he does his homework with precipitating , or not. In addition, homework helps the student understand the material much better.
Finally, homework promotes the students, helps them understand the material. Actually, we can see in the homework some kind of an indication to see which of the students do their tasks and which of them do not- it's a test to show responsibility.
This is much better, except for your third paragraph which is not entirely clear.
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Daphna.
Thursday, February 26, 2009
Thursday, February 12, 2009
Space Exploration.
Have you ever thought about space? Have you ever wanted to be in space? Do you think that space exploration can help humanity? Space exploration helps to get more information about life in another world. Through the years all the knowledge about space is increased. When people think about space exploration they earn advantages and disadvantages.
On the one hand, when people think about space exploration they think about the future. Each year the number of people on Earth is increasing and one day the place on Earth wouldn't be enough. So space would provide us a place to live on. In addition, at the time that the space exploration is taking place humanity earns knowledge about living in another place, another world. On the other hand, space exploration causes damage to space. Humanity interferes in space, trying to get some information in a way that. causes damages. Humanity sent people to space and with some new inventions that made astronauts lives more easily on space but they terrific the environment on space.Moreover, space exploration requires a lot of money that goes to develop things that can help the astronauts to stay in space, like suits and equipment for the astronauts.
Finally, space exploration causes a lot of damage, more than its benefits. It's helps humanity but also causes a lot of damage to space.
On the one hand, when people think about space exploration they think about the future. Each year the number of people on Earth is increasing and one day the place on Earth wouldn't be enough. So space would provide us a place to live on. In addition, at the time that the space exploration is taking place humanity earns knowledge about living in another place, another world. On the other hand, space exploration causes damage to space. Humanity interferes in space, trying to get some information in a way that. causes damages. Humanity sent people to space and with some new inventions that made astronauts lives more easily on space but they terrific the environment on space.Moreover, space exploration requires a lot of money that goes to develop things that can help the astronauts to stay in space, like suits and equipment for the astronauts.
Finally, space exploration causes a lot of damage, more than its benefits. It's helps humanity but also causes a lot of damage to space.
You still have quite a few grammar mistakes and some of your sentences need rephrasing. I tried to make it clearer inorder for you to correct more easily your work. (65)
Daphna.
Thursday, February 5, 2009
Do what you want!
You go outside with your friends and they want to take drugs. In your opinion taking drugs is a wrong decision .You are afraid from the way your body will responed to the drug and even more that your parents will notice that you are using the drugs. What will you do? Take drugs and be "cool", or stay true to yourself?
This example shows us a situation in which you are under "peer pressure". Peer pressure is a situaton in which people in your age try to influence your decisions to the bad side.
I think that peer-pressure is not good and you shouldn't listen to your peers whenever they try to influence your decision. For example, your friends are planning to go out at night to some discotheque and your parents don't let you go. On the one hand, your parents don't let you go and you respect their decision inspite the fact that you do not agree with them. On the other hand, your friends try to influence your decision and in some way help you sneak out from your house and come with them to the discotheque. What should you do? So, you should listen to your parents becuase they are adults and they are responsible for you and your friends just need to understand you.
Finally, peer pressure is something that you can't change and everybody is effected by it. You should pay attention to what you do and get to know what the perfect solution to your problem is.
This is better, but still needs work. Please correct your essay again. (75)
Daphna.
This example shows us a situation in which you are under "peer pressure". Peer pressure is a situaton in which people in your age try to influence your decisions to the bad side.
I think that peer-pressure is not good and you shouldn't listen to your peers whenever they try to influence your decision. For example, your friends are planning to go out at night to some discotheque and your parents don't let you go. On the one hand, your parents don't let you go and you respect their decision inspite the fact that you do not agree with them. On the other hand, your friends try to influence your decision and in some way help you sneak out from your house and come with them to the discotheque. What should you do? So, you should listen to your parents becuase they are adults and they are responsible for you and your friends just need to understand you.
Finally, peer pressure is something that you can't change and everybody is effected by it. You should pay attention to what you do and get to know what the perfect solution to your problem is.
This is better, but still needs work. Please correct your essay again. (75)
Daphna.
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